Part 1 of my novel, Phantom City, and other works.Phantom City Blog Thieves Short film director writer designer
Posted 24 April 2012 - 11:18 AM
Specifically, my blog site focuses on Phantom City, but it also acts as a resume of sorts, collecting all of my most proud work, including short stories, short films, game design, graphic design, music, essays, reviews etc. For this thread, however, I'd like to keep the topic focused on Phantom City.
Here is part of the Plot Summary and an excerpt follows to whet your appetite...
October 12, 2137-
After the Ghost War had reduced the planet to ruin, civilization finds shelter in the massive ocean vessel of Phantom City. After several years of unstable revival, the assassination of a beloved political figure turns the government on its head and law enforcement into a ghost chase. A misfit group of smugglers inadvertently is reeled into the conspiracy when their biggest client accidentally chases a shady prospect into their mitts who might just be the elusive assassin.
This excerpt is from the first page of the Prologue, Rook Takes Bishop...
The silvery blue smoke climbs from the cauterized hole in his forehead as if his soul dances onward to the heavens. His eyes happily frozen in the reflection of the confetti drizzled air that celebrates his reelection that will now never happen. The sound of fans cheering seeps away as time pulls it into a weightless descent...
The hand of his handsome blue-eyed competitor grasps his lifeless shoulder trying desperately to reverse the violent tragedy as Legion security droids surround them in the precise grace of their programming, sweeping the crowd with cold black battle rifles that blend into their own armored anatomy.
Reelect Commander Barone!
...the holo-banner reads, projected proudly above the crowd that is ensnared in a near time locked state of shock and dismay.
More than a mile away, perched upon an anonymous tower, the empty podium where the Commander stood only a moment prior, phases out in the visor of a sniper rifle. The scope clicks back and sinks into shoulder guard. The barrel twists and slides into the weapon. A broken ballet of clicks and clacks deconstructs the frame of the rifle, transforming it into a slim portable case as a pair of boots touchdown on the roof and begin their approach. A glove, coursing with radiant digital patterns matching the design of the case, retrieves the package and secures it to a utility sash.
The figure dives off the tower's edge into the neon horizon.
To read the rest of Part 1 and other works by me: http://jessegbarnes.blogspot.com/ I encourage you to read the "Plot Summary & FAQ" when you first visit the site to get an idea of what exactly Phantom City is, why I wrote it, and where my style came from.
I welcome your thoughts and hope to hear from you soon!
Posted 28 April 2012 - 09:20 PM
I went to read the prologue. The web page background makes it difficult for me to read comfortably, and thus affecting my evaluation. Can you possibly upload it elsewhere?
Edited by Eiuol, 28 April 2012 - 09:20 PM.
Posted 29 April 2012 - 12:20 AM
For right now, I would like to refrain, if I can, from uploading it elsewhere. I significantly darkened the background in hopes to sharpen the contrast between the text and the image behind it. I hope that will be good enough for you. If not, then I'll consider uploading a totally new backdrop.
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