Devils_Advocate Posted August 19, 2008 Report Share Posted August 19, 2008 I am writing a short story, and I am going to try and get it published in a magazine soon. It's a little graphic, and isn't for people who read really happy books where everything goes right and the happy couple gets married and lives happily ever after. It's for people who recognize the serious situation the world is in and the barbaric nature of Statism. If you can't handle blood or something like that, DON'T READ. The theme is mostly about how true power can only come from holding to yourself and staying independent, whereas physical power only comes from another's submission. However, I do want to sell it before I put it up on the internet for all to read. But I trust most of the people here, and I need some criticism. So, the first five people who express interest in reviewing the story shall receive a copy via Private Message as soon as I've finished this draft (might be a few days, I don't have much computer access). So, hit that reply button if you're interested! PS: I know, by the first paragraph, it might sound like a malevolent universe premise story. But if you read it, you can tell it's not. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
01503 Posted August 19, 2008 Report Share Posted August 19, 2008 I would like to read it. Consider this an "expression of interest" in reading the story. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Anthem Posted August 19, 2008 Report Share Posted August 19, 2008 I would also like to read it. It sounds interesting. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Devils_Advocate Posted August 19, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 19, 2008 Just to make sure - don't mean to sound paranoid or distrustful, but I just want to be safe. Can I just have a written statement, right here, that you won't claim it as your own and will attribute any material from it to me? (Thadius Main Jr.) I trust you all, but I still would feel safer if you just wrote it down. Thanks. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
01503 Posted August 19, 2008 Report Share Posted August 19, 2008 I promise that no one will see it besides myself. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Anthem Posted August 19, 2008 Report Share Posted August 19, 2008 I promise that no one will read your work except for myself. Don't worry, I'm a writer so I know exactly how it feels to think someone may try and steal my stuff. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Devils_Advocate Posted August 19, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 19, 2008 (edited) Thanks, guys. I'll have it up at least by Friday Morning (once again, computer access problems.) Edited August 19, 2008 by Devils_Advocate Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pokarrin Posted August 19, 2008 Report Share Posted August 19, 2008 I would like to review your story-no one will see it but me and, possibly, my wife (though she's not likely to be interested). I promise not to steal your work. I'm writing a novel myself, and I understand your paranoia. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Charlotte Posted August 19, 2008 Report Share Posted August 19, 2008 I would like to read it. I promise to you that I will, in no way give your work to another. Would you mind if I printed it out? Cause its a personal preference of mine, it allows me to analyze it better. lol But I do understand if you dont want me to, and I wont if that is your wish. later Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake Posted August 19, 2008 Report Share Posted August 19, 2008 I trust you all, but I still would feel safer if you just wrote it down. Thanks. I'm not a lawyer, but I think that if you post a bit of the story (say, the first ¶), that might suffice as proof that you wrote it. Regardless, you should definitely save/print any e-mails/pms you send with it, and ensure they are dated. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Devils_Advocate Posted August 19, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 19, 2008 Would you mind if I printed it out? Cause its a personal preference of mine, it allows me to analyze it better. lol But I do understand if you dont want me to, and I wont if that is your wish. later Feel free! I'm the same way, I can only stare at a computer screen for so long. I'm not a lawyer, but I think that if you post a bit of the story (say, the first ¶), that might suffice as proof that you wrote it. Regardless, you should definitely save/print any e-mails/pms you send with it, and ensure they are dated. Sounds good! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D'kian Posted August 19, 2008 Report Share Posted August 19, 2008 Just to make sure - don't mean to sound paranoid or distrustful, but I just want to be safe. It's not paranoid at all. However, there are other measures you can take. I think it's possible to protect a PDF file so it can't be emailed, copied, modified or even printed (of course there are ways around it; everything can be hacked). You should look into it if you send your stories around before publishing them. Even if the people you're sending them to are trustworthy, not everyone who may access their PC will be, and accidents do happen. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Devils_Advocate Posted August 22, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 22, 2008 (edited) I'm not a lawyer, but I think that if you post a bit of the story (say, the first ¶), that might suffice as proof that you wrote it. I'll post a few paragraphs. I've got the first draft done, I'm going to clean it up a little, and then I'll send it out in the morning to the people who asked for it. Here's just a little bit: We grabbed the prisoners and shunted them out of the box car, deliberately being as forceful as possible. The more we hurt them, the quicker their minds would collapse. That was the logic the government had always used – and it had always worked for me. And I had been doing this job for nearly 20 years. We marched them in a long line up to the gate. On top of it, in large and imposing steel letters spelled out the words “EREBUS DETENTION CENTER FOR THE POLITICALLY INCORRECT AND SOCIALLY INDEPENDENT. Erected by the Monrian Federal Government, 2166.” ... ... I tore the bag off of the head of a man about halfway through the line. When I first tore it off, it startled me. Most of the faces were bloody and broken – all of them were hung in a dejected manner that showed they had pretty much had their spirit broken already. But this man – his shaved, sharp lined face was completely clean – not a cut or blemish on it. His medium length, shiny blonde hair was still nicely combed, unlike most of the prisoners. But the most amazing thing about him was his head – it was held high, looking straight ahead, as though he saw no problem with what was going on. Edited August 22, 2008 by Devils_Advocate Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nyronus Posted August 22, 2008 Report Share Posted August 22, 2008 Is it too late to sign up? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Devils_Advocate Posted August 23, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 Is it too late to sign up? Nope. I'm sending them out right now, as a matter of fact. Sorry it was late, we ended up leaving the house early and have been out almost all day. But, it's still friday, so - everyone who signed up will be given a copy. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SBP2009 Posted August 24, 2008 Report Share Posted August 24, 2008 I'd love to read your story. And I swear, by my life and my love of it, that I would not seek to steal the work of your imagination. First person narrative from the perspective of a member of the tyrannical regime... interesting. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fletch Posted August 24, 2008 Report Share Posted August 24, 2008 Count me in. I would like to read it as well. And no, I wont swipe it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Devils_Advocate Posted August 25, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 25, 2008 I'll send you two copies tonight. PS, SBP2009: Very clever. Thumbs up! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Devils_Advocate Posted August 25, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 25, 2008 Sorry, it's going to be one more day. It's on my mom's work laptop (it, unlike mine, isn't broken), and she doesn't always bring it home. I'll try and get her to tomorrow, though. Hold in there! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BrassDragon Posted August 26, 2008 Report Share Posted August 26, 2008 I'd like to read it as well (and give feedback), if you don't mind - I promise not to distribute in any matter. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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