Good line?

[D'kian]

I've found over the years that when I talk too much about a story I'm working on, I tend to lose interest in actually writing it. I already owe at least two board members a completed version of a story I posted about going on three years now...

So I won't say anything about this story, but there's a piece of dialogue I want to try out on an audience. I think it's good, but I want some independent confirmation.

I'll give a little background, the minimally necessary. The speaker is a defense attorney who's defending a woman accused of manslaughter, claiming self-defense. She's speaking to the lead detective on the case, who feels badly that the lawyer's client is on trial, and thinks in fact she has betrayed the lawyer's client. The detective has offered to help, and the lawyer has refused her offer.

The lawyer then tells the detective: "You want I should condemn you? Would you feel better if I told you what a wretch you are? I'm sorry, detective. I can't do that. You're not a wretch or a traitor. You're an angel, and that's a much harder thing to be."

Any thoughts?